This story is inspired by The Iliad which was adapted from The Iliad by Alfred J. Church
with new twists and allies for the Trojans.
Story:
Greeks and Trojans. Trojans and Greeks. Neither liked each other but tolerated each other. Greek ambition and the idea of Greek freedom.
The Greek General Menelaus had an alliance with the Trojans, much to the displeasure of his own brother Agamemnon. One night his city-state was hosting the Prince’s of Troy, Hector and Paris, for their collective triumphs on the battlefield. Helen, the wife of Menelaus, seduced the Trojan Prince Paris to her private quarters. There they plotted their elopement to return to Troy.
The next morning Helen boarded the ship to Troy and left her husband behind. The Trojan entourage was completely unaware that the had a stow away on board, much less the Queen of Sparta. The Spartan Imperial Palace Guards were notified of the Queen’s departure and informed General Menelaus who ordered the Spartan Navy to hunt down and sink the Trojan ship at all costs.
Due to the Trojans having better and faster ships the Spartans never caught up with them and docked safely in the Port of Troy the following week. Angered by this, Menelaus enlisted the help of all the city-states to attack Troy. They set sail for Troy with 50,000 ships and 2,500,000 soldiers on board.
During their journey to Troy they destroyed Mediterranean Trojan allies in Chryse that left thousands of civilian’s dead. The Chryse navy set sail for Carthage to inform the young Queen Artemis of the Phoenicia Empire of the invasion force headed for the beaches of Troy. Artemis ordered her Grand Armada to be ready and to set sail in a week.
Within the walls of Troy the Trojan army was getting ready for a fight as news of massacres of their allies in the Mediterranean Sea had reached their ears. The winds of the sea were carrying the Greeks closer to Troy and by weeks end the Greeks would have an invasion force marching for the gates of the city. Within these meetings the wife of Prince Hector, Andromache, raised concern for the amount of lives that would be lost defending the indecent relationship of Prince Paris and Queen Helen of Sparta.
A week later the Greek fleet was insight and preparing for a landing. Prince Hector readied the Trojan army for battle and charged at the Greeks when they landed while the Trojan war machines destroyed hundreds of Greek ships so the Trojan infantry on the beaches wouldn’t be overwhelmed. The Greeks were able to land the Myrmidons and their leader Achilles before the ship was lost. Achilles led his men on a crusade to destroy the war machines to allow the Greeks to land their entire army. By night fall the Trojan army was pushed back as the entire Greek navy had landed.
Not wanting to let the Greeks reach the gates of Troy, Prince Hector and Prince Paris led the Trojan army on a counterattack with the cover of darkness. With Achilles not wanting to fight again so soon his own cousin Patroclus led the Greeks into battle but perished when Hector impaled him with his spear.
The Trojans retreated to the city. Achilles ordered the army ready for battle. But little did the Greeks know that Phoenician Armada was about to land an hour after they left for Troy.
Engaging the Trojans in battle Achilles met Hector in one on one duel during the fight. Achilles was quicker and stronger than Hector, but the Prince of Troy was smarter. The wits of Hector would only last for so long as Achilles stabbed Hector in his chest.
The demoralized Trojan army was about to retreat when the horns of the Phoenician Army sounded and cut down the Greek army like corn.
With the deaths of all Greek Generals and the Death of Hector, Prince Paris was in charge of peace negotiations. The terms were unconditional and the Greeks returned to Greece with Trojan escorts so the Trojans took all of the city-states riches to pay for the war.
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| Prince Hector and Prince Paris of Troy |
Hi Pierre!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your retelling of this section of The Iliad. I've always loved this story, and Greek mythology in general. I'm going to be honest though, I'm not 100% sure if you made any changes because it's been so long since I've read it.
Was this the first time you read The Iliad? What do you think about it, and what was your favorite part?
Hi Pierre! Great job on this! I like how you added your own twist but kept true to most of the story itself. I myself from reading the story and also watching the movie was on the trojans side. What made you still want to kill off hector out of curiosity? for me he was one of the characters that actually just paid for everyone else arrogance. Especially prince paris. I myself retold the story of the iliad, well a portion of it. I talked in Helens point of view and made the war part of her revenge on everyone. I also included the goddess Aphrodite since she is the goddess of love and beauty. I ended up learning through another class mate that Aphrodite did have a cause in the war offering helen to paris even though Helen was married. It was for a contest between Hera, Athen, and Aphrodite who chose the mortal paris as the judge of the most beautiful goddess, Of course paris chose Aphrodite. You should check it out, I would love to hear your feedback! Great job! Have a great week!
ReplyDeleteThanks for the feedback, Emily.
DeleteI chose to kill Hector because it would essentially force Paris to grow up. His young foolish self started the war and got so many of his own people killed.
While he has a learning curve in my story with new allies I chose this route for the growing pains. Andromache is still alive in this version and if I do a second part to this story it would be Andromache being extremely loathsome of Paris and Helen. Basically have her son growing up in the background for revenge that would see Hector be avenged.
A bit dark but I like writing stories with high stakes and risks that will leave my audience in shock.
Hi Pierre,
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job writing this story! It was interesting and kept me hooked since the beginning. I like how detailed it was and didn't leave many blanks to be filled in by the readers. would like to suggest maybe having a longer author's note for the people that have not read the original story. It is easier to read a summary in the author's note than to go to the original and read the whole thing. I have never read this story, so I am not sure what changes you made to make this your own. In a previous comment I read that you killed off Hector to make Paris grow up some and I like that. Sometimes people need things like that to happen to make them come to reality and see what is really happening. What was Helen's motive for leaving the Greeks? Maybe you could add a little kick in there and aadd some details.